CrossFit

There’s something about endorphins that induce a certain madness in me.   It’s a safe madness.   It forces me to rush to a computer or a pad of paper, write out something brutally honest.   This was the case on New Year’s Eve.  Many things can get my endorphins going.   Refraining from masturbation for days at a time, taking a hike in the woods or an intense workout at CrossFit.

It was late April when I started working out at CrossFit.   Six weeks earlier, I started a cleanse.   My goal before the cleanse was to become a raw vegan.   Mid-cleanse, something new came in.   I sensed a super intense workout was needed, one that wouldn’t get boring after a few months.   After much research, I happily stumbled upon CrossFit (it’s recommended that one consumes a paleolithic diet for the best results).   Here we are early January 2013 and I’m still participating in this great workout program.   It paid off as I’m now one of two members of the month.  Check out the write-up.

It saddens me to announce that this is the penultimate post whereupon the script will be posted.   The blog, of course, will continue.   Kudos to those who have commented on the script.  Please remember that the script is both incomplete and unedited.   There’s a chance that someday the piece will reach completion.   Another more pressing story has taken over.   As of Sunday, I’ll begin drafting this up.   I doubt this new script will make it to the blog.   The process of writing it will be mentioned extensively.

               INT. BELLA'S PLACE. BEDROOM - LATE MORNING

               Lying in bed, with skin as blue as the sky, Bella gasps for
               air.

               Kate hands Bella a steaming cup of tea.

                                   KATE
                         Take this.

                                   BELLA
                             (mouths)
                         Thank you.

               Bella takes a sip of the tea.  Coughs up pink phlegm.

               Damian hands Kate a box of tissues.

               Kate wipes the pink phlegm off her chin.

                                   DAMIAN
                         Kate, can we talk?

               KITCHEN

               Kate pours boiling water into a cup.

                                   KATE
                         Want a cup?

                                   DAMIAN
                         Sure.  Kate, is your aunt
                         delusional? 

               Kate's face turns beat red.

                                   KATE
                         Excuse me?

                                   DAMIAN
                         Relax.  I'm asking out of concern.

                                   KATE
                         It's been ages since I've seen her. 
                         You know that.

                                   DAMIAN
                         She claims Charlie's a woman.   A
                         demon woman, to boot.

               Kate hands Charlie a cup of tea.

                                   KATE
                         Charlie?  Careful it's hot.

                                   DAMIAN
                         The man, or woman according to your
                         aunt, you sent here.

                                   KATE
                         I wouldn't send my worst enemy
                         here.  Putting anyone, anything
                         near that rodent child, would be
                         tragic.

                                   DAMIAN
                         Kate...

                                   KATE
                         I'm sorry.  That's an insult to
                         rodents.

               A loud shriek emits from the bedroom.

               BEDROOM

               Kate and Damian rush in.

               Bella's seated on a rocking chair sewing.

                                   KATE
                         Aunt Bella what are you doing out
                         of bed?

                                   BELLA
                         Sewing.

                                   KATE
                         You're ill.   Get to bed!

               Kate grabs Bella's hand but the old woman pushes her niece
               out of the way.

                                   BELLA
                         Don't tell me what to do.  I'm
                         sewing now.  I'll go to bed when
                         I'm tired.

                                   DAMIAN
                         Why'd you shriek?

                                   BELLA
                         What did you say?

                                   DAMIAN
                         You shrieked?  What happened?

               Bella holds the sewing needles like a dagger.

                                   BELLA
                         I don't know who you think you are
                         but I'll tell you.  You are a sick
                         man doing sick things for evil
                         people.   I'd watch my tongue if I
                         were you. 

               Kate reaches for the sewing needle.

                                   KATE
                         Aunt Bella...

                                   BELLA
                         Don't "Aunt Bella" me, young lady.
                             (beat)
                         Both of you, leave me.  I've got a
                         blanket to sew.

               Bella's focus shifts directly onto the unfinished blanket barely
               covering her kneecaps.

2 thoughts on “CrossFit

  1. When I’m editing a script I’m often looking for words to remove and/or ways to make a script more concise. To that end, I would change:
    “Bella takes a sip of the tea.” to
    Bella sips tea.
    I also think about clarity. So, since there are three characters in the scene, two of which are female, I’d add clarity to the following:
    “Kate wipes the pink phlegm off her chin.”
    by changing “her” to “Bella”
    For fun, I might change this:
    “Bella’s seated on a rocking chair sewing.” to
    Bella sews, while swinging on a rocking chair. (something strikes me as odd about “Bella’s seated”)
    I like this line:
    “Bella holds the sewing needles like a dagger.”
    though, whether this is supposed to be singular or plural is confused by the plural “needles” and singular “dagger”
    imo

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s